Can anybody help me edit my letter?
Timawa asked:
Feel free to change or add a sentence…
Feel free to change or add a sentence…
Dear Ms. Johnson:
We appreciate your giving us the opportunity to look into the problem you describe.
As the owner of the Peachtree Business Plaza, I understand how the noise interferes with your conversations with clients.
Since commercial leases are different than residential leases and can not contain language limiting noise, Mr. Chomko, as a commercial tenant, is entitled to conduct his business at this plaza.
I have done much thinking and I feel that the best course of action would be for the 3 of us to discuss this over lunch and that way we will be able to come up with the best course of action.
Sincerely,
August 10, 2009 at 7:34 PM
August 13, 2009 at 8:14 PMcathygirl32
Great letter, but you might consider adding a closing paragraph asking Ms. Johnson to contact you to set up the lunch. Oh yeah and spell out the word “three”.
#98
August 16, 2009 at 4:37 AMCapri
Good one i will recmond these changes,
we apprecite for giving us the opportunity to look into the problem as mentioned in your letter
another change,,,cannot contain language noice Limit
and also consider a V. good point raised in first answer
#99
August 18, 2009 at 5:39 PMEden*
Dear Ms Johnson,
As owner of the Peachtree Business Plaza, I understand how noise interferes with your conversations with clients, and we appreciate your giving us the opportunity to look into the problems you describe.
As you will appreciate, commercial leases are different from residential leases and do not contain language limiting noise, therefore Mr. Chomko, as a commercial tenant is entitled to conduct his business at this Plaza.
However, after much consideration, I feel the best course of action would be for the three of us to discuss this matter over lunch at a mutually convenient time, with a view to reaching a satisfactory resolution for all parties involved.
I look forward to hearing from you in due course.
Sincerely
#100
August 18, 2009 at 6:40 PMbryan C
Dear Ms. Johnson:
Thank you for giving us the opportunity to look into the problem you described.
As the owner of the Peachtree Business Plaza, I understand how the noise interferes with your conversations with clients.
Since commercial leases are different than residential leases and can not contain language limiting noise, Mr. Chomko, as a commercial tenant, is entitled to conduct his business at this plaza.
I have done much thinking and I feel that the best course of action would be for the 3 of us to discuss this over lunch and together we can come up with the best course of action.
Sincerely,
#101